Alternative Ending

Yes! You've found my first song! Congratulations... Wrote this last night. Please keep nasty thoughts inside your head. Thankyou.

So tired,
Close my eyes and fall,
To the deepest depths of death,
A land of sleeping beauty,
Never to awaken.

Disgusted,
Spread my wings and glide,
To the highest point in the sky of the damned,
Into the arms of those without hope,
Those like me.

So alone,
Fold up and hide away,
A bustling city filled with soulless demons,
Yet though busy, completely empty,
An aweful feeling.

Emotionless,
Tae my blade to your throat,
Periced and swimming in the black of your blood,
The dark of your heart,
I hope it hurt.

Painless?
You steal my heart and lie to me,
Wrapped up in the centre of your own world,
Choke on your selfishness,
I'll watch you bleed.

Hurt, I'm crying, blood, I'm dying, never to return, never to return.
Bleeding! Lying, broken, lonesome.
You left me there to bleed. You let me weep.

You, you deserve to die. Die!

Few... This song is the most complicated one I've written.
Oh, before I continue... the stuff in bold is screaming, the stuff in italics is whispered.
Right, now these three lines
"Hurt, I'm crying, blood, I'm dying, never to return, never to return.
Bleeding! Lying, broken, lonesome.
You left me there to bleed. You let me weep." are said at the same time. It sounds good in my head =D. And with the very last line, "You, you deserve to die. Die!" the first you is both screamed and sung, as with the first die. The second die is just screamed.
And guess what? Alternative Ending has an alternative ending! I couldn't decide what would sound better, "Damn, I'm crying, help, I'm dying, never to return, never to return. Bleeding! Lying, broken, lonesome. You left me there to bleed. You let me weep." staying as it is or just being, "Bleeding! Lying, broken, lonesome." Screamed, whispered and sung at the same time. Any suggestions?